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2019年11月16日雅思独立写作范文:The family has a great influence on children’s development

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2019年11月16日雅思独立写作范文:Thefamilyhasagreatinfluenceonchildren’sdevelopment,buttheinfluencefromoutsideofthehomeplaysabiggerpartinchildren’slife.Discussboththeseviewsandgiv...

2019年11月16日雅思独立写作范文:The family has a great influence on children’s development, but the influence from outside of the home plays a bigger part in children’s life. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. (2019/11/16)

天道智思雅思教研组审题与解析

本题与2013年6月15日的雅思考题是部分重合的,2013年6月15日要求比较家庭和媒体对孩子成长的影响,而本次没有限定为媒体,而是更为广泛,要求比较家庭内和家庭外对孩子成长的影响。

本文审题的核心是要比较家庭内和家庭外对孩子成长的影响。题目中明确提出的观点之一是“家庭外的影响更大”(bigger),而不是简单的“有人认为家庭对孩子成长有影响,其他人认为家庭外对孩子成长也有影响”。考生必须对这个“bigger”作出回应。

以下是独家雅思独立写作范文:(7分范文)

The emotional and social development of young children has a direct effect on their future overall development. At different stages in their life, children's development is under the influence of the family members at home as well as teachers, friends, and other factors outside of the home.


Family certainly plays a crucial role in children’s development, as family members are the first people that young children have regular contact with. Ensuring that children in the early years have their basic needs met can help them establish secure attachments(情感), which is the cornerstone(基石)of their emotional development. Moreover, we will know how important a loving, nurturing home is to children by noting that many young law-breakers are from broken families. An emotionally deficient(有缺陷的)child may easily be led astray (引入歧途)and get involved in antisocial crimes. At the same time, he/she will also find it hard to build healthy emotional relationship with others and therefore have to live in undesired seclusion(隔绝;孤独).


As children grow older, factors outside of home such as teachers, TV, friends, to name only a few(等等), come into play and influence their life. As this is a time for children’s social and intellectual development, these factors become even more important than home. Children rely on their teachers in school for academic progress, their peer classmates for developing social and leadership skills, and various media for forming their world outlook(世界观). It is, indeed, reasonable to say that as they grow up, children are moving further and further away from the influence of their parents.


To conclude, both parents at home and friends, teachers, and media outside play an important role in children’s development. The family has the greatest influence on children’s emotional development when they are young, and factors outside of home play a greater role in children’s intellectual and social development on their way to maturity(成熟).


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